In recent years, technological advancements have significantly changed the way people live and work. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Explain why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body part.
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Keep one main idea in one paragraph.
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You answer the question and give your opinion.
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You include both good and bad sides of technology.
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