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In recent years, technological advancements have significantly changed the way people live and work. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Nowadays
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technology
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has
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 advanced in so many ways
we
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that we
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has improved in many ways 
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Body · 1
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outwweigt
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outweigh
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 one of the big
advantages
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that aslo
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today's
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Despite the
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 of the major disadvantages is
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losing
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 individuals tend to use computer assiat in everything
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nutshell,
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 the overuse of
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technology
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i belive
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I believe
 that the
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because
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positive
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Make your main idea more clear in each part.
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Add one or two clear examples to support each point.
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Explain why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, for example, however, and in conclusion.
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Keep one main idea in one paragraph.
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You answer the question and give your opinion.
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You include both good and bad sides of technology.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing to separate ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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