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Band 2

Some people think that global environmental problems should be dealth with locally. Others think that they should be dealth will locally. What is your opinion?

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There are many issues in the world, and environmental problems
one
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are one
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 of them.
individual
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Individuals
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 tend to harm their life without
realizing
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realising
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. Climate change
,
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 and pollution are affecting the way we live, and
harm
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harming
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 a lot of species. In
this
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 essay. I will discuss
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 topic in detail, and I will give my own perspective. First and foremost, local nation usually more careful about the plantation; they love their simple lives, and try to bring
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sustainable agriculture.
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, some Industrial Revolution
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 that from happening. I think communities
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 live outside the farm field don't care about any difficulties in crops, because they don't like the simple life.
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, we all know that we
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rely on
agriculture
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agricultural
 food. It
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 and more important than
any thing
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anything
 else.
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 it might
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 problems
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such
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 as air and water pollution, because it
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 to
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nature. The solution is to prevent any damage effect, like burn the tree
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, such as burning it or
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cut
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 it
.
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down.
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 In conclusion, local people who grow the
agriculuture
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agricultural
 environment, and they
useful
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are useful
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 to it, I don't think they
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 cause of any problematic issue.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you think local action or world action is better, or if both are needed.
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Give one or two clear main ideas in each body part, and explain each idea more.
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Use simple real examples, like air pollution in one city or tree cutting in one area.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Some sentences do not link well to the main point.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You stay on the topic of the environment through the essay.
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You try to give your own view in the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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