Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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the
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environment
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. In my opinion, I
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agree with the second view because there are much seriouse issues rather
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loss of specific kinds of plants
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animals. Include
air
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poultion
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pollution
and the water as well, waste
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produced
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cars like fuels and oils.
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also
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, there are a lot of big fires around the world.
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variety
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of animals and plants
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affect
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our live and maybe we undervalue these rare animals
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all that
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lead to enviremental issue and
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play
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role in the real
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in the world.1
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indivisual attudites
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individual attitudes
have great influence
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the
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environment
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it, because without
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being aware of the danger we cause on a
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daily basis, lead to
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constant
damage
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the environment. Unfortunatly the
air
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we
breath
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breathe
every day in the most capital cities around the planet
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by the bad
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pollution
we face.
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nowadays
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very common
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multi
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factors
reasons
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for example
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around
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the cities we live in
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are a lot of bad smoking
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in summer seasons
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the
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hottest cities like my hometown, with a lot of fires that affect the
air
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.
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, the wrong way of disposing things like the waste in the river or
no where
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nowhere
places
impect
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impact
our environment.
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, facing real danger with
air
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poultion
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pollution
compared to other opinions about other problems.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say why loss of animals and plants is a problem, and why air and water problems may be bigger.
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Give your opinion in a clear way in the introduction and support it again in the end.
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Use one clear main idea in each body paragraph. Then add one or two simple examples.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easy to follow. Use clear paragraph order: introduction, one side, other side, opinion, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, next, however, because, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it. Some parts now jump too fast from one idea to another.
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You gave your opinion clearly. You think other environmental problems are more important.
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You tried to discuss both views, not only one side.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraphs and a short ending, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like firstly, secondly, however, and to sum up.
Fully explain your ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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