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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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Taking a
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year
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 before starting
univesity
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university
 is a very common practice in
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European
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 countries.
Students
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 are encouraged to travel or gain work experience before they actually start their academic journey. I believe
this
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 is an excellent idea and can bring several benefits to them in
a
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both the
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 short and long term.
In
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 average,
students
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 finish school in their eighteens or
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nineteen
, either
way
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way,
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 they are young, fresh and full of energy to explore the world and live fully. Researchers from a
university
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 in Canada believe that the late teens are the best phase of life in terms of vitality, because our body and mind are in a good balance and able to
absorv
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absorb
 and process all
kind
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 of experiences. And
this
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 is why
,
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 they highly recommend
students
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 to take a
gap
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year
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, especially in a place away from home, where they can learn different habits, culture, languages and to be resilient.
Skill
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A skill
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 that,
according to
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 the research, is rarely
learnt
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learned
 during
university
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, as the focus stays more
in
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on
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 career and work space. The same survey interviewed 50
students
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that
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who
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 had taken a
gap
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year
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 before starting college and 50
students
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that
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who
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 started
the
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their
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 studies
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straight
 away, without any
gap
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. The results showed that the
students
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that
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who
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 took the
gap
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year
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 were feeling more
fullfilled
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fulfilled
 and confident about themselves and their future,
while
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 a
significantly
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significant
 portion of the ones who decided not to go on a
gap
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year
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regreted
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regretted
 not doing
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. Among the comments were mentions
to
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of
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 a
fast paced
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fast-paced
 life
,
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 that rarely allows to slow down and
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 quality time with friends and family. The
students
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 interviewed
also
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 said that it's
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 difficult to take a
gap
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year
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 after
university
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, since the trend is to follow from the
university
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 to a
work space
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workspace
 and career, changing the
dinamic
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dynamic
 of life. In conclusion, a
gap
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year
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 before
university
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 is a positive practice and enhances
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students
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students'
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 capacity of adapting to different
enviroments
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environments
 and people.

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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more direct in each body part.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer linking words between some ideas.
task achievement
Add one more clear example to support your view.
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Explain how work experience helps students, not only travel.
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Check that each part stays close to the question.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear start, body, and end.
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Your opinion is clear from the start.
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You use a study and survey to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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