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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by regions and by gender for the last year.

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The bar below shows the men's and women's rates of illiteracy in many
countries
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 during the
last
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 year. The units are measured in percentage from 0 to 60. In general, women's illiteracy rates are much higher than men's in every country. The highest level of illiteracy is shown in South Asia,
while
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 the lowest is in Developed
Countries
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. Moving to a more detailed analysis, in developed
countries
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, both males and females are extremely low, around 1
percent
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per cent
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In contrast
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, Oceania and the Caribbean demonstrate a lot higher rates compared to Developed
Countries
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.
On the other hand
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, in Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab States have grown sharply, especially focusing on females. Obviously, the biggest upward trend is illustrated in South Asia.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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