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The bar charts give data on noise levels by day and by night in rural and urban areas in Europe

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The charts illustrate the number of
people
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 who were affected in Europe by 4 types of
noise
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 (
traffic
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, train, aircraft and industry) in cities and rural
areas
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 in 2007.
Overall
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,
traffic
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noise
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 affected by far the largest number of
people
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 in both urban and rural
areas
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 and at both times of
day
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,
while
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 industrial
disturbed
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noise disturbed
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 the fewest.
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, city residents were consistently more affected by all four types of
noise
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 than
people
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 living in rural
areas
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, during both the
day
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 and the
night
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. In cities,
traffic
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noise
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 was by far the biggest problem, disturbing 64
million
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people
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 during the
day
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 and 48
million
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 at
night
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. Much smaller numbers of residents were affected by trains, at 10
million
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 in the daytime and 8
million
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 at
night
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. Aircraft
noise
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 troubled 4
million
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 during the
day
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 and only 1
million
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 at
night
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,
while
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 industrial
noise
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 had the lowest figures of all, at about 1
million
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 in the daytime and 0.25
million
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 at
night
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. A similar pattern can be seen in rural
areas
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,
although
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 the numbers are lower.
Traffic
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noise
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 again affected the largest group, with 34
million
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people
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 affected during the
day
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 and 24
million
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 at
night
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. Train
noise
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 disturbed 8
million
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people
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 in the daytime and 6
million
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 at
night
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,
whereas
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 aircraft
noise
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 affected just 2
million
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 and 1
million
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people
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 respectively. No rural residents were reported to be affected by industrial
noise
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, either during the
day
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 and
night
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, noise, traffic, areas, day, night, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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