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Every country should produce enough everything that the country needs so it should not rely on imports. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In recent years, the idea has become popular that
countries
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 should produce all the
nesessary
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necessary
 items like vegetables, grains, and fuels on their own, without depending on imports and exports from different
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.
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 some people may disagree, I believe that it is very important to depend on international
trade
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 for several reasons. The primary reason that I do not support
this
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 view is that it will be very challenging for some
countries
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 that cannot produce all the basic necessary items needed.
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 is because all
countries
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 do not have the exact same environmental or weather conditions to produce certain things.
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, all the
countries
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 that can only extract a very small amount of oil cannot meet the needs of society, resulting in problems across the nation.
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, they will need to depend on
trade
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 with neighbouring
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.
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, relying on other
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 for
trade
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 can strengthen
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 between
countries
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.
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, it can be supportive in hard times. Another important factor is that it should dramatically affect multinational companies that carry out
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trades all over the world.
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 opponents might disagree with the fact that it will make the country independent so that it does not have to rely on anything. I believe that for a better and more cooperative world, we need to understand the needs of other
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, help the neighbouring
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 experience a better life. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is important to depend on different
countries
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 to avoid the challenges like shortages of essential goods and a better economy
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trade
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. The long-term benefits of depending on different
countries
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 outweigh any drawbacks.

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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more clear in each body part. One point should lead to one clear reason.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words with care. Some parts connect well, but a few lines feel sudden or not fully tied to the last idea.
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Add one more clear and real example to support your view. This will make your answer stronger.
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Explain your ideas a little more deeply. Some points are good, but they stop too soon.
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Keep your position fully clear from start to end. Your view is mostly clear, but one part about companies is not easy to follow.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep it to the end.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
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You use some good linking words like for example, furthermore, however, and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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