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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year.

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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of monthly
student
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 expenditure in the UK in 2016
and
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 the bar chart gives information about
sources
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 of
student
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 income in the same year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
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student
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student's
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 monthly rent accounted for the largest proportion,
whereas
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 travel recorded the smallest figure. It is
also
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noticable
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noticeable
 that
student
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 loan was the most common
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sources
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source
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 among students,
while
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 grants and funding were the least popular
sources
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 of
students
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students'
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 income in the given years. In terms of
pie
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the pie
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 chart, monthly rent had the highest figure, accounting for 385
pounds
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.
This
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 was followed by food, at 124
pounds
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,
whereas
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 the
figure
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figures
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 for travel, socialising, and bills were relatively lower, at around 52, 64 and 69
pounds
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, respectively.
In addition
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, the other
categaries
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categories
 were 91
pounds
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.
According to
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 the
student
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 income,
student
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 loan was the considerably higher than other
sources
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, at about 80%.
In contrast
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, the
sources
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 for savings, bank overdraft, and grants and funding were comparatively lower, at approximately 40%.
Furthermore
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, family and part-time
job
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jobs
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 were
the
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apply
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also
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most
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the most
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 common
sources
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 among students, at around 70%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, sources, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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