The bar chart below shows the number of visitors at three malls in somecity between 1995 and 2015

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The bar chart illustrates a comparison of airport visitors in terms of three
malls
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airports
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in John.F Kennedy,
LaGuardia
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, and
Newark
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over the period 1995
and
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to
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2000.
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, it is evident that
LaGuardia
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conssistently
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consistently
recorded
higher
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a higher
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amount
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number
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of individuals
compare
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compared
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to other malls,
while
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Newark
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remained
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experienced
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some fluctuations. In 1995, John.F Kennedy had a bit more than 20
million
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visitors,
whereas
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LaGuardia
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had more than 30
million
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.
Newark
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,
in contrast
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, had the smallest amount, at about 15. By 2000, there was a notable rise in all malls.
LaGuardia
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saw a substantial increase to around 70
million
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,
while
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John.F Kennedy reached approximately 45
million
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.
Newark
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also
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grew moderately
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and had a bit more than 40
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words laguardia, newark, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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