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Some people believe that preserving the natural environment is vital, whereas, most make no effort to do so. Why do you think this is happening? What are some simple actions that could help the environment? e

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The green environment is our future, taking care of our natural resources and the environment is very crucial
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 our right to know about it in detail. In my opinion,
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 people don't take precautionary measures
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reasons
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 could vary from one another.
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, research says
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 of
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awareness and maybe
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 because of unwillingness to participate in
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 practices. Here are some key points which could help our surrounding are as follows 1. Unawareness of the sustainability- Many people
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 to know more about
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sustainable
 development goals and
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 benefits
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 our
nature Earth
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planet
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. 2. Waste- Accurate disposal of the
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 and gadgets. 3. Grow more plants- Participate in
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environmental
 awareness programmes. 4. 3Rs- Recycle, Reuse and Reduce
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 are the 3R which could
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absolutely
 help our
day to day
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 activities to segregate the trash and reduce the wastage, recycle the plastic material and most
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 reuse the objects
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 can help our environment remain neat and clean.

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Answer both parts more fully. Say clearly why people do not act, and give a few simple actions with short examples.
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Write in full paragraphs, not as a list. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
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Add a short ending to sum up your main ideas.
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Support each main point with a simple example, such as saving water at home or using a cloth bag.
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Use linking words like because, so, also, and for example to connect ideas more clearly.
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You stayed on the topic and gave some reasons and actions to help the environment.
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Your writing has a clear start and some main points that the reader can understand.
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You gave useful ideas such as the 3Rs, planting more plants, and safe waste disposal.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural environment
  • preserve nature
  • make an effort
  • environmental damage
  • climate change
  • air pollution
  • water pollution
  • loss of wildlife
  • daily habits
  • public awareness
  • sense of responsibility
  • easy and cheap choices
  • single-use plastic
  • reduce waste
  • reusable bag
  • save energy
  • save water
  • turn off lights
  • public transport
  • plant trees
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