The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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This
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line graph illustrates the yearly average of spending on mobile
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services and residential
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services from 2001 to 2010.
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, the yearly expenditures on cell
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had increase over the years,
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the numbers
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decreased for
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residential
phone
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serveces
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services
. In terms of cell phones, in 2001, the average was about 200
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, increased to 300
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by 2002 and remained static until 2003. Starting from 2004, there was a dramatic rise in the average
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mobile
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expenditure, as it increased from 400
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and reached 800
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by the end of the period.
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of
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mobile phones, residential
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services' average was 700
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at the
begining
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beginning
.
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, the
money amount
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amount of money
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declined dramatically until it became only 400
dollars
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in 2010.

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