Some people believe that machines will eventually replace all human jobs. Do you agree?

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There is an opinion that technology, sooner or later, will be able to substitute human resources in all working spheres. I disagree with
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point of view inasmuch as
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lack emotional
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, needed to be an effective working unit, and if not regulated correctly,
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may cause chaos in all business processes
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of human control.
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of jobs
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fully operated by
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may seem appealing to most, more often than not, it is almost impossible to accomplish in most of the crucial spheres of work,
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as education and healthcare.
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is because working in these spheres requires not only phenomenal expertise and experience, but
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a wide spectrum of feelings and emotional
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vital for their success to flourish.
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is mostly because doctors and teachers rely not only on their hard skills, but
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on soft ones in order to comfort
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and find the right words to both teach and heal
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successfully. To illustrate, Honda Asimov, one of the most developed robots, cannot distinguish simple human emotions. Until human emotions are categorised, it is almost impossible to imagine a robot taking over
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's place in the careers that are "life or death". Yet another reason why the
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of running working processes by
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is unlikely is that it may cause negative repercussions because of the lack of human control.
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may be excellent at handling routine tasks
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as managing the company's day-to-day financial operations.
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, making important decisions,
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as hiring and making employees redundant, is not something that
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should be responsible for, as it requires not only thorough calculations of risks and benefits, but
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the unique human
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is unlikely to be replaced by any
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existing.
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is because even a small mistake made by artificial
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running a machine could change
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's lives dramatically. A great example here can be a case in one of the most prominent IT companies in Uzbekistan. The "UzExpo" company's operational procedures were run only by AI, and they were the pioneers.
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was supported by the public and seemed like a fresh start for a new era.
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, one night changed everything. Thousands of employees were mistakenly fired after
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bug in the system, leaving them without any funds in their balance, taking months to reboot the system and settle everything down.
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everything was brought back, thousands of
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had to suffer, waiting for the top management board to make
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calculations of the salary the employees were supposed to receive. In conclusion, even though
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are not affected by illnesses and tiredness that are very common for
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,
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advantage can never replace the energy of a real heart and common sense, irreplaceable in most business processes.
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, the
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of a robot replacing
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in the workplace is preposterous.

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For task response, your answer is clear and you give your opinion from the start. To be even better, explain a little more why some jobs can be done by machines, and then show more clearly why all jobs cannot be replaced.
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For task response, you answer the question well and keep your opinion clear all through the essay.
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For task response, your main ideas are relevant and focused on the topic of machines and jobs.
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For coherence and cohesion, the essay is easy to follow because each body paragraph has one main idea.
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For coherence and cohesion, you have a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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