There are many environmental problems, such as the greenhouse effect and climate change, and people have hardly found any solutions. Why is this the case? And what measures can be taken?

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global ecological problems
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we have to
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find
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solution to prevent bad consequences.
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solution. One of the main reasons for global warming is human activity, especially the burning of fossil fuels. Factories, cars and space programs
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release
a large amount of carbon into the atmosphere,which leads to the greenhouse effect and
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climate change
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, carbon
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levels
in the sky is affects on the
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amount
of ozone holes around the world.
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, these damaged areas in the ozone layer lead to more ultraviolet
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radiation
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which
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temperature
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address
these problems, several measures can be taken.
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with, goverment should invest in renewable energy sources
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as solar.
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, wind power and
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stricter
environmental laws must be introduced.
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, many countries have successfully reduced carbon
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pollution
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lack of
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government responsibility for human activity
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,
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introducing some
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we are able to prevent future harm
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processes

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Answer both parts more fully. Say more about why people have not found solutions, not only what causes the problem.
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Give clearer main ideas in each body part. One main idea, then explain it, then give one example.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to trust. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly. Use simple words like first, also, because, for example, and however.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the one before it in a clear way. Some parts now are hard to follow.
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Make your ending match your main ideas from the body. This helps the essay feel complete.
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You answered both questions and gave some ways to solve the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You used some linkers like for example and moreover.
Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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