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The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the
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The
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 pie charts
is illustrates
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illustrate
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the sources of electricity generation in
ireland
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Ireland
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,
while
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 the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country .The unit is measured in percentage.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 coal is the most used source covering 45
percente
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per cent
 of the total.
While
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,
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apply
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 other
energy
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 sources like wind and solar have decreased.
In contrast
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, gas plays a
noticable
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noticeable
 share in
energy
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production
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production,
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 it is more than a third.
According to
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 the
table
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table,
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 the main reason for using
energy
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 in the same country is heating
people
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, people
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 use heating devices in their daily life
with
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, with
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 a 55% from the
whole
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total
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 amount.
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,phone charging and consumer electronics are not used for
much
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much,
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 they
acounts
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account
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 for 5% of
energy
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.
In addition
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, people
fequently
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frequently
 use kitchen appliances for cooking every day
and
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, and
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 that's why it takes a part
from using
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of
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 the power.
Lastly
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, lighting has hold a important role in people life houses are
alays powerd
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always powered
 with light .
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Also
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 malls and coffee shops often lead to
use
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the use
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their
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of their
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energy
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applianc
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appliances
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • environmental impact
  • residential sector
  • industrial sector
  • commercial sector
  • trends
  • changes over time
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