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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint? Q

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Nowadays,individuals have different expectations when it comes to their
careers
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while
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 some prefer to remain in the same company for many years,
other
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others
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 believe that frequently changing
jobs
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 is more beneficial.
This
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches On the one
hand
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 staying in the same position for many long periods can provide
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 of stability and comfort for the individual
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Employees who remain in one workplace are more likely to gain
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in-depth
 knowledge of their field.
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 remaining in the same position for
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 term can lead to
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 of learning new skills and limited career opportunities .
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 frequently changing
jobs
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 can offer a variety of opportunities to learn new skills and
growth
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grow
 in career paths ,and
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potentially
 earn higher salaries.
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, changing
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 too often can create instability and uncertainty. It may be difficult for individuals to adapt to new environments, In
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 both staying in the same job and changing
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 frequently have their own impact and drawbacks.
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,the most suitable choice depends on a person’s ambitions, personality, and long-term career objectives.

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Answer both sides more fully. You give good main ideas, but each side needs more detail.
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Add one simple example for each view. This will make your ideas stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body part.
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Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'for example', 'because', and 'however'.
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Check sentence form and punctuation, because some ideas stop too early or join too much.
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You answer both views and give a clear ending.
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Your essay has a clear four-part structure: start, two body parts, and ending.
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You use contrast words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' well.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stable job
  • fixed income
  • job security
  • work relationships
  • move up
  • long-term career
  • same company
  • gain experience
  • learn new skills
  • better pay
  • career growth
  • new work environment
  • less stable
  • build trust
  • loyal worker
  • leave soon
  • personal goals
  • family needs
  • right choice
  • advantages and disadvantages
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