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The table and graph bellow give information on internet searches in the US between 2004 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph compares four pieces of information on Internet searches in the US from 2004 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there were significant changes over the period.
While
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 companies
such
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 as Yahoo saw a drop,
However
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 companies
such
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 as Google significantly rose over the period. In November, internet searches in Google started at 35 per
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cent
, but
this
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 figure has significantly increased to 63 persentage at 10th September in the US.
However
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, Yahoo started at approximately 33 per cent in November, but
this
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 figure has significantly decreased to 20 per cent in September.Microsoft started at 18 per cent in November ;
this
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 figure decreased over the period. The other internet searches , AOL and Ask Jeeves, remained unchanged

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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