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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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The bar chart illustrates the industries'
contributions
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 to India's gross domestic
product
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, namely
agriculture
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,
industry
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, and
services
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, in the years between 1960 and 2000, a four-decade period.
Overall
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, during the four-decade time period,
contributions
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 of the
agriculture
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sector
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 to gross domestic
product
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 had experienced a moderate decrease,
while
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services
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 witnessed a consistent increase. Despite the other sectors, from 1960 to 2000, the
contributions
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 of
industry
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 had shown minor changes.
Initially
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, investments in the
agriculture
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sector
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to
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of
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 India's gross domestic
product
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,
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 showed a downward trend. From 1960 to 1980, the
agriculture
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sector
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 constituted the bulk of the proportion despite its dramatic decrease, accounting for approximately 62%, 55%, and 45%, respectively,
stood
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 at around 15% by the end of the time period (2000). Regarding investments in sectors of India's gross domestic
product
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,
services
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 showed an upward pattern. From 1960 to 1980,
services
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 showed a steady increase by around 18%, 23%, and 28%, respectively, followed by a significant rise and quadrupling its beginning, reaching 63% in 2000.
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, the
industry
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sector
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 stayed constant
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between around 15% and 25%, which had the lowest percentage towards other sectors except in 2000. Despite the low percentage of
contributions
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 of the
industry
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sector
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,
agriculture
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 had the lowest proportion by around %15, ranking behind
industry
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, in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words contributions, product, agriculture, industry, services, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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