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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 graph describes the data about
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households
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household
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 income in the UK during 2007, 2011, and 2015. The numbers are measured in
millions
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.
Overall
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, the highest
number
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 of workers with
$100,000
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a $100,000
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 or more salary was in 2007 and 2015.
However
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, in 2011, the most
wide-spreaded
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widespread
 salary was $25,000-$49,999. Moving to a more detailed analysis,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
households
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who
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that
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 earned less than $25,000 generaly had an upward trend from 2007 to 2015, remaining nearly 27
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millions
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million
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 during
this
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 period.
On the other hand
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,
households
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 with $25,000-$49,999 salary rose slightly to 30
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millions
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million
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 from 2007 to 2011, but
then
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 decriased for 3
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. Provides data regarding the $50,000-$74,999 and $75,000-$99,999 incomes, it can be seen that
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households
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the number of households
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number
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 remained stable
nearly
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at nearly
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 21 and 15
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millions
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million
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 from 2007 to 2015.
To sum up
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, the
number
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 of
households
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 with high income increased dramatically during
this
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 period of time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, millions, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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