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The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in th UK who consumed the recommended daily amout of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

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The bar chart compares the
percantage
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percentage
 of UK
man
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men
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,
women
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 and children who consumed the right amount of healthy food every day in three
differante
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different
 years.
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chart
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the chart
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women
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, women
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 are
highest
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the highest
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consumer
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consumers
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 of fruit and vegetables over
all
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apply
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the
period
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entire period
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. meanwhile
men
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 shows som fluctuation in the figure and never
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pass
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 the other
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runner
 in the race, which gives
a
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an
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 idea
of
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that
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women
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 are the most healthy. Children
sow
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show
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 a slight
rose
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rise
then
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 a small decline in number. In 2002,
women
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has
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had
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 the highest number of consuming daily
amont
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amounts
 of fruit and vegetables as 25%.
whereas
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men
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 only
cam
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came
 second to consume 22% of healthy food.
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After
that
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 youngs where the least in
this
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 comparsion securing 11% only.
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2006
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2006,
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women
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sow
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 an
increas
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increase
 in number to reach 32%.
Men
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 and cheldren sow slight change as
men
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goes
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 to be 28% and
chidren
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children
 hit 16%.
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,
next
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the next
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 year of the period 2010
,
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apply
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shows a clear drop for all the
figure
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figures
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, as
women
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,
man
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men,
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 and children becomes 27%,24% and 14%,respectively.
This
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chang
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change
 where peoble has reduced there consuming of healthy food
and
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, and
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the
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at the
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 end of 2010, and gitting more
to get
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into
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 bad habits.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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