The graph below shows how people buy music. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph gives information on which format of
music
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(streams,
downloads
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and
CDs
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purchased)
buy
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by listeners more often.
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, streams became
dominant
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the dominant
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format of
music
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delivery,
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it was at the bottom out at the beginnig of the period
in
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2011.
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,
other
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the other
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two types of
music
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listening -
downloads
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and
CDs
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purchased had an impressive initial
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position
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, but eventually
shown
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showed
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less sales than first mentioned method.
Firstly
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,
streams
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streaming
music
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format hit
their
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its
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low at approximately 5% in 2011, and
then
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steadily went up untill 40 % in 2018, which was
bestseller
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the bestseller
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among other types of
music
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.
On the other hand
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, the remaining two lines,
such
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as
downloads
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and
CDs
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purchased, eventually did not differ in their
last
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figures, and stood at approximately 25 and 30
respectively
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, respectively
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. In
2014
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2014,
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was sold
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apply
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just over 40 % of
music
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downloads
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and
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were sold, and
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the
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apply
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it eventually went down.
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with
CDs
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purchased with starting point
at
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was
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about 55%,
declined sales' percentage
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and sales declined
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every year
untill
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until
around 25% in 2018.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words music, downloads, cds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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