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Part 1: The chart shows the pertentage of henseholds haring different goods in a conutry in Furope in 200+ and 2005

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of households having different goods in a European country in 2004 and 2008.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 most items increased in 2008,
while
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 TV recorded the highest figures in both years. Meanwhile, dishwashers showed the lowest figures. In terms of
tv
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TV
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, it had the highest percentage in both 2004 and 2008, at around 95% and 100% respectively , followed by telephone at 90% in 2004 and 86% in 2008 .
In addition
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 CD player recorded 70% in 2004 and 80% in 2008.
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this
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 three items showed
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significant values.
Conversely
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, dishwashers recorded the lowest figures in both 2004 and 2008, at around 27% and 35% respectively.Meanwhile washing machine demonstrated
a
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moderate values
standing
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 at 60% in 2004 and 65% in 2008.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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