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The chart below data about the subway systems in six cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at list 150 words.

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The provided table compares six different underground railway
systems
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 in terms of date, route, and annual ridership
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the London subway is the oldest and the most extensive route,
whereas
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 tokyo
systems
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serves
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 the highest number of passengers annually.
Conversely
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, the newer networks, Kyoto and LA, are significantly smaller and have fewer riders Starting with the older networks, London opened first in 1863 and had the longest track with 394 kilometres. In any case, Paris and Tokyo, despite their networks being shorter , 199
km
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 and 155km respectively, the subway
systems
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 of them accomodate considerably more people
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 Tokyo stands out with a staggering 1927
million
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 passengers annually, the highest figure in the table,
while
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 Paris sees 1991
million
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 compared to London's 775
million
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 Turning to the more recent
systems
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, Washington DC's network, established in 1976, spans 126 kilometres but carries a relatively moderate number of users at 144
million
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 per year. The newest and smallest railway is located in Kyoto and LA, which commenced operations in 1981 and 2001, respectively. Los Angeles has a slightly longer track than Kyoto, 28
km
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 compared to just 11
km
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, and both serve a similar low number of passengers, at 50
million
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 and 45
million
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 yearly

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Vocabulary: Replace the words systems, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subway system
  • network length
  • established/year of opening
  • passenger numbers
  • comparison
  • geographic
  • demographic
  • capacity
  • usage
  • infrastructure
  • transit
  • urban area
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