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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenegars at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 many people believe that international exchange will grow pupil at the school. First of all, there are a
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 of reasons, we need a lot of news for our school system
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, so
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government
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the government
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 should do it.
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, some think that each country has
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its
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 own
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priority
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Firstly
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, nowadays
teenegars
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teenagers
 need news of
study
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the study
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 system
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, and
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 they know
international
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how international
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 schools
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apply
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teach
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apply
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their students.
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on
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 the other hand, I think if teachers have speacial method of study, pupils don't bother
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 lesson, they start
interested
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to become interested
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 in subjects
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In
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 closing, from my perspective, each government
shpuld
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should
 study with new methods for their teachers

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if the good points are more than the bad points.
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Add one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it more.
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Use one or two simple examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Use clear paragraph order: intro, body 1, body 2, end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences and connect them well so the meaning is clear.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote an introduction and an ending.
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You tried to discuss both sides of the topic.
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Your opinion is shown at the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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