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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the houses or building they live in. What is the reason for this? How can people research on this?

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Write about the given question only. Your essay talks about class talk and lecture, not about house history.
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Answer all parts of the question. You need reasons why people want house history and ways they can find it.
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Use one clear main idea in each body part, then add a small example or detail.
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Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. Keep this shape.
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Some links are used well, like on the one hand, on the other hand, and in conclusion.
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Make the ideas connect better inside each paragraph. Some lines do not follow the point before them.
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Use simple linking words too, like because, so, for example, and also.
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You wrote an introduction and a conclusion.
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You used paragraphing, which helps the reader.
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You tried to discuss both sides before giving your view.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Genealogical
  • Restoration
  • Historical architecture
  • Structural integrity
  • Archival databases
  • Historical significance
  • Intrinsic curiosity
  • Renovation projects
  • Permits for modifications
  • Property boundaries
  • Technological advancements
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