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The bar graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different attractions in Bangkok.

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The graph illustrates the
precantage
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percentage
 of tourists to Thailand who visited four different attractions in
Bangkok
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.
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, the highest figure was for
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China
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Chinatown
town
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,
while
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Bangkok
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Zoo
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 recorded the lowest. In
2014
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2014,
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 the
precantagr
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percentage
 of the
Sea
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word
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World
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chart
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 showed
more increased
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an increase
 over the period, it was 70%
moreover
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 the
Bangkok
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Zoo
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chart
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 demonstrate 50% of
visited
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visits
.
In addition
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Wax
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 museum was almost 40%.
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Furthermore
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 the lowest
chart
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 was
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China
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Chinatown
town
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the
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, the
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precantage
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percentage
 of it was 20%. In 2015 was
sharp
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a sharp
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increaseing
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increase
 in
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China
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Chinatown
town
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it
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, it
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 was 80%.
While
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Wax
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the Wax
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 museum had 70%, and
sea
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 world figure was between 40% and 50%.
for
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For
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 the
last
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 figure it was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 decreaseing it was 20%.
the data of
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In
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 2016, it was a stronger
yera
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year
 for
China
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town
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chart
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 it was
roesing
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rising
 until recoreded 100%. Scondly
Wax
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 museum
chart
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it
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apply
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was 80% proportion.
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Also
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Also,
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Sea
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world
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World
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 was increasing until 50%.
for
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The percentage for
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Bangkok
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the Bangkok
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Zoo
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 was 20%. In
2017
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2017,
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 it
was
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apply
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sharply fell in 3 charts
thay were
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:
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Bangkok
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Zoo
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Sea
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world
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World
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,
China
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town
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 and the highest was
Wax
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town
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 it had 70%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bangkok, china, town, zoo, sea, chart, wax with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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