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Band 2

Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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These days
countries
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, countries
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towards to
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are
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 investing in
transport
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 vehicles
such
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 as buses and
subways's
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subway
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 trains. 
These
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 essay will outline both views
rather
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, rather
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shifting
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than shifting
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 towards investing in public
transport
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positive
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, positive
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 development rather
negative
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than negative
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Firstly
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,
development
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the development
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 of
the
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apply
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transport
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 contributes to the ecosystem of the city. Less busses working on diesel will benefit
citizens
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citizens'
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 health, because of reduced amount of hydrocarbon to the air.
Secondly
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, Better
transport
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 and its accessibility
makes
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make
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 the
transport
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 system less busy and work on time.
Finally
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, arranging the
transport
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 system, trains and buses,
easier
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will be easier
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 to
acccomplish
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accomplish
 in
near
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the near
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 future and cheaper. In my opinion,
spendig
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spending
 money
for a
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on
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 public
transport
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 represents
these
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, these
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 days
a
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, a
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positive
consequences
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consequence
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 for a government and the citizens.
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like
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,
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 in
a
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apply
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big cities
such
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 as Amsterdam, London development of
the
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apply
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buses and trains
bring
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brings
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 a city a clear atmosphere because of new
electro
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electric
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 transports which do not
spread the
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emit
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 hydrocarbons, and
less
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fewer
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 junctions
in a
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on
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 roads
due to
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 accessibility of the new transports for
a
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apply
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people
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people,
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 what made the traffic in
a
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apply
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rush hour go
smooth
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smoothly
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.

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Answer both parts more clearly: give full reasons and then say why it is good or bad.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main ideas easy to follow. Put one clear idea in each paragraph.
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Explain your points more. Some ideas are good, but they need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like First, Also, As a result, In my view.
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Your example is useful, but make it more direct and easy to understand.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic paragraph plan with an opening and an ending idea.
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You used a real-world example with big cities.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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