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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 possess an idea that in the upcoming
days
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days,
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 hard copies of
books
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 or
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newspapers
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 will lose
its
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their
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 appeal completely because they will have access to them without any cost.  Neither
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do I
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completely rule out
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 notion
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, nor
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do I
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support
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. I think in
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the future
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 online version of
books
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 &
newspapers
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 will get more popularity
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, but
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 the demand for the published ones will remain intact
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for
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 many
people
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. As both parties
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, from
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 online and offline contenders of
newspapers
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 and
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books
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books,
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 have their own
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arguments
, let's explore their logics. We can not deny that the scope and number of
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online
pdf
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books
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 and news outlets are rising substantially. Most of the
newspapers
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 now have their online versions.
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, any
readers
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reader
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 can go through any
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 of the world
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, such as The
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 Times Magazine,
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 York Times
easily
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, easily
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by
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with
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 a specific
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number
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 of subscriptions.
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, print versions of some
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 or magazines are being closed down
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 diminishing returns. Publishers are selling their
books
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 from
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an e-library
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand, still many
people
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 have
strong
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a strong
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 interest
for
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in the
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 printed version of
newspapers
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 and
books
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. There's no sign of
fading
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the fading
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 away of their hobbies.
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Instead
 of reading
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apply
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online
they
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, they
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 are placing order in online and getting their desired
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 from home. Surprisingly, recent data shows the circulation of different
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have
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has
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 increased. Though there
are
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 a rise of online visit in
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 sites, printed copies are being sold out simultaneously. It proves that those who are reading
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from
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online
some portion of them
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are
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 definitely buying the hard copies as well. 
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end
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 I can say that readers may read some
newspapers
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 and
books
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 freely from interntet but they probably can not visit all the sites without payment. It's evident that some
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 literate
people
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 will switch to
online
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the online
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 version of manuscripts and media in future. But the demand for
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apply
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printed
books
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 and
newspaper
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newspapers
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 will remain eternal.

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task response
Give a clearer answer in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in a direct way.
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Explain your main ideas more fully. Some points are there, but they need deeper support.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to trust. Some examples are too general.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part have one main idea only. This will help the essay feel more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Some lines jump too fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple joining words well, like first, also, however, and so.
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You answer the topic and talk about both online and printed reading.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs for the main parts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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