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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of households with access to the
internet
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 in Germany,
UK
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the UK
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 and Spain from 2007 to 2019.
Overall
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, the
used
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use
 of
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internet
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the internet
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 in Germany and
UK
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the UK
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 experienced the largest percentages throughout the period of time given;
while
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,
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apply
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 in
Span
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Spain
, the proportion of
internet
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used
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use
 had the lowest ratio.
However
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, the
used
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use
 of
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internet
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the internet
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growth
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grew
 rapidly in three countries over the period. In Germany, the proportion of
internet
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used
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use
 began at about 70% in 2007, and it was the highest percentage over
the
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apply
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time.
However
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,
this
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 figure
was a
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showed
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 steady growth, reaching over 90% in 2019. Followed in
UK
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the UK
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,
used
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the use
 of
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internet
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the internet
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 stood at round 70% in 2007
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. Similarly
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similarly
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,
this
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 figure followed the same pattern and
its
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apply
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rose to just over 90% in 2019.
On the other hand
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, in
Span
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Spain
, the percentage of
internet
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used
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use
 recorded the lowest value, starting off
with
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apply
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at just over 40% in 2007
, from
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. From
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 2009 to 2019, it increased steadily, reaching between 51% and 90%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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