The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two tables show information about the temperatures and hours of daylight. The table on the top is
London
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in London
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, and the bottom is
Sydney
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in Sydney
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. The information came from the same weekend in December 2018.
Overall
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, Australia's sunrise was almost 2 hours
early
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earlier
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than that of the UK, 05:45 and 08:05 respectively.
However
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,
sun
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the sun
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in London set at afternoon, which was much earlier than that of Sydney, like 4
pm
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pm,
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while
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the other city gets dark
on
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at
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8pm. And both cities'
time
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times
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of sunrise and sunset
was
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were
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constant; there was only a minute of the gap.
Secondly
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, the temperature in the UK was much colder than that of Australia, which didn't even reach over 10 degree at
Friday
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Friday,
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28th
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28th,
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while
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Australia peaked
26
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at 26
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degree at the same day
respectively
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apply
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.
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, the highest
temparature
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temperature
in London was 13,
wherease
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whereas
the maximum number of Sydney was 31, the gap between
two
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the two
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was about 18.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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