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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email: Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Sam, Hopefully, you and your husband are doing absolutely fantastic. My apologies for not being in touch; at least I tried, via
this
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 letter. Congratulations on getting admission to the top-ranked
university
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! I was happy when I came to know about your admission. For your stay, I would recommend
you
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that you
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 live close to the
university
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, if possible. There are plenty of apartments
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, especially
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 for students, and the rent is very reasonable. The good thing is that all amenities are included in each apartment, as I lived there for the duration of my studies. The best way to find accommodation is to search regularly on Facebook Marketplace, where most of the owners publish their apartments for rent. Apart from that, don't forget to check the
university
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's noticeboard; there are a plethora of listings mentioned there every time. Just keep in mind when choosing a place that laundry and a heater are available. I think these things are very important; the laundry shop is very far away from the
university
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. I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon! Best regards, Abc

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Answer all parts in a more full way. You said where you lived, how to look, and one warning, but the warning part needs more detail.
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Give more clear support for your ideas. For example, say why living close is best, and what kind of mistake students often make.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear point in each part. This will help your email feel easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Words like also, because, so, and however can help.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with the ending. 'via this letter' sounds odd in an email, and the first line is not needed for this task.
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You covered the main parts of the task.
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Your ideas are easy to understand most of the time.
coherence and cohesion
The email has a clear start, middle, and end.
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You used paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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