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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people assume that the same number of male and female pupils should be allowed in all departments in
universities
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. I substantially disagree with the view because of economic efficiency and sociological
persepective
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perspective
.
Initially
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,
popular
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a popular
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 subject in specific
gender
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 can be relative to the demand of
job
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the job
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 market.
For example
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, nursing or child
caring
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care
 should be preferred by women
than
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over
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 men. The proponents of the
gender
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 quota in the application of higher education insist that
this
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 culture can exacerbate
the
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apply
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gender
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stereotype
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stereotypes
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.
However
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, graduates
require
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need
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 to get a job after their
study
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studies
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. Ultimately,
Universities
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 would be open
every
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to all
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 courses to students without any limitation by
gender
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.
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, these days,
the
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apply
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gender
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 is considered more complicated
more
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apply
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than just male and female. From transgender to
gender
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fluids
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fluid
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, a lot of
gender
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 agenda are arrived recently
and
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, and
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 the
rule
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rules
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 of application of
universities
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 should be hard to follow the views.
Consequently
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, the action for
gender
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eqaullity
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equality
 should
make
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address
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 another
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gender
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form of gender
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 discrimination related to education. In conclusion,
universities
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 put more efforts to make equality in education,
while
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 they have to consider economic
perspective
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perspectives
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 and sociological issues. Sometimes, Excessive tries to make
balance
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a balance
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 in some areas could generate
contra-discrimination
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counter-discrimination
 in invisible parts.

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Answer the question more fully. Say clearly how much you agree or disagree, and keep this clear in all body parts.
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Add stronger support for each main idea. Explain why your points are true with one clear reason and one simple example.
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Use examples that are more direct and easy to understand. The nursing example is useful, but it needs more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas connect in a smoother way. Some parts jump too fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, but do not overuse them. Words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion can help.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make the essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
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Your essay shows your opinion, and you give two main reasons.
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You try to use an example to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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