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In modern society, ambition is more and more important. How important is ambition for being successful in life? Is it positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Ambition
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 plays a significant role in modern
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and
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I believe it is essential for achieving success. In my view, it is a positive development because it provides individuals
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clear
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, and motivates them to work consistently. When
people
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 have strong ambitions, they are more likely to stay focused, overcome challenges and pursue long-term growth. Undoubtedly,
ambition
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 helps
people
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 set clear goals in
life
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People
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 get a new
direction
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 and plan a road map in their minds to become successful. The
direction
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 and motivation
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 them to achieve a particular target in a specific period.
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, if a student dreams of becoming a professional doctor, they stay highly motivated
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 and are willing to study hard for many years. Their
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 encourages them to work hard, completing challenging courses,
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 focused on their goal, which eventually increases their chances of becoming successful in
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,
ambition
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 is not only
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 important for gaining but
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 promotes discipline
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 and dedication in
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life
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 as well. I consider it
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a positive development.
Ambition
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 pushes
people
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 to become a better version of themselves.
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 of wasting their time, they start working on their weaknesses
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 and focus on what they want to achieve.
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, Students who want a successful career in future develop a serious and disciplined attitude towards study from their school age.
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, they
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 better opportunities in future, lead a better lifestyle which they
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 dreamed of. In conclusion,
ambition
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 gives
people
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direction
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, motivates them to work harder, and helps them achieve long‑term goals. It encourages self‑improvement and leads to better opportunities in the future.

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Answer both parts more fully. You say ambition is very important and good, but you can add one short idea about when ambition can be bad if it is too strong.
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Give deeper support for each main idea. Some points are clear, but a few lines repeat the same idea about goals and hard work.
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Use more exact examples. Your student and doctor examples fit the topic, but they are quite general.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this simple plan.
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Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences are long and have too many commas. Use short clear sentences.
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Check paragraph focus. In paragraph two, one idea about discipline could be explained better or moved to the next paragraph.
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You answer both questions and keep your opinion clear from the start.
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Your main ideas are easy to follow: ambition gives direction and pushes people to improve.
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You use examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow in a logical order.
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Words like 'for instance', 'in addition', and 'as a result' help connect ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ambition
  • success
  • goal
  • hard work
  • effort
  • discipline
  • patience
  • motivation
  • failure
  • keep going
  • improve
  • career
  • job
  • money
  • power
  • stress
  • balance
  • values
  • relationships
  • achieve
  • dream
  • focus
  • responsibility
  • positive effect
  • negative effect
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