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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recyle more of their waste?

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Some
people
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 believe that
waste
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 is not
enough recycled
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being recycled enough
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 and
goverments
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governments
 should transform the practice of recycling
in
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into
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 law. In my opinion, in order to increase
people
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's commitment
with
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waste
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 recycling,
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 should become a legal requirement. Not only
more strict rules should
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should more strict rules
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 be
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as well as
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but also
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 more considerable fines for those who don't do the recycling management properly. For a few
people
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, it is only when they are affected in their pocket that they will actually engage in some recycling routine. Some
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were not educated enough about the problems caused by the lack of
waste
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 recycling, others purely because they don't care enough about it. All the resources collected from the fines could be invested in sustainability projects and technologies for the
enviroment
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environment
. Countries
such
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 as Germany and Sweden have strict laws when it comes to
waste
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 recycling and management, and
this
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 culture of punishment helped to create awareness. There, the population
themselves
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itself
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 helps to inspect and report cases where the rules are not being followed. In
this
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 sense,
government
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the government
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 should work on campaigns to
incentivate
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incentivise
 recycling and show the importance of it for the planet. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, I think laws should be allies in terms of making
people
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recycling
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recycle
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 their own
waste
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and
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, and
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 the government should implement a system where everyone would have to follow in order to recycle better.

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Answer both sides more fully. You say law is needed, but you should also explain how far it is needed and if other ways can help too.
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Make each main point bigger with one clear reason and one clear result. Some ideas are short and not fully built.
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Use one or two more clear examples to support your view. The Germany and Sweden example is good, but explain it more.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some parts feel like single notes, not one full line of thought.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas into clear body paragraphs. For example, one paragraph on why law helps, and one on what else government should do.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence connection and word form. Small errors make the flow less easy to follow.
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You give a clear opinion from the start and keep it to the end.
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You answer the main question and stay on the topic of recycling and law.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
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You use a real country example, which helps support your point.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycle
  • waste
  • law
  • rules
  • government
  • home
  • sort
  • bin
  • collection
  • convenience
  • education
  • awareness
  • rewards
  • fines
  • enforcement
  • habits
  • norms
  • cost
  • benefit
  • plan
  • monitor
  • support
  • culture
  • communication
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