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Ambition is an important characteristic of people. How important is it for people to make success in life? Is it a positive or negative charateristic for success?

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Everyone has goals in their own
life
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 its depends on their interests
and
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, and
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its
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it's
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 a necessary key which makes
better
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a better
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 and
successful
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more successful
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life
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. In
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs i am discussing
about
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apply
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how it is important in individual
lifes
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lives
 and
also
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provide
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providing
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 some positive views.
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 with, ambition play crucial role in
everyone
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everyone's
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life
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without
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. Without
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 any goal
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life
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, life
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 is like
a
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apply
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passing
a
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the
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 time
so
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, so
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 we are here to
acheive
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achieve
 something from
life
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 to become sucessfull it need our efforts and
hardwork
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hard work
.
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,
In
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in
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 schools we are making some plans about our future
which
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, which
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 leads towards
positive
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a positive
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 move in our
life
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some
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. Some
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 have to choose to become a doctor, scientist,
pharmacist
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or pharmacist
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. So the
person
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 can work
according to
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 their goals.
Moreover
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,
Some
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some
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 students
are following to
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follow
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 their mentors and
populor
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popular
 personalities
which
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, which
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 give energy to
acheive
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achieve
 money and fame.
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, goals provide
positive
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a positive
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 impact in our
life
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it
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. They
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 work as a fuel to make
life
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 better and
smooth
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smoother
,
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.
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,
In
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in
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 schools or
college
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college,
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 if
any
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a
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person
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 have interest in sports like basketball and get medal
in
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for
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 winning
matches
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matches,
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 it provides popularity and fame to the
person
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it
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, which
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 automatically gives
positive
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a positive
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 change in
the
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apply
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life
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 some students plan to give
enterance
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entrance
 level exams like IPS, IAS
or
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, or
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 for
army
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the army
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 and navy to get better government job it gives
positive
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a positive
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life
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 and
upgrade
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upgrades
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 the
standand
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standard
 of living.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it is only possible when
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person
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a person
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have
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has
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 better
ambition
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ambitions
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 in
the
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apply
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life
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 and
also
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a
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apply
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positive thinking
which
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, which
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escalade
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escalates
 towards
best
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the best
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life
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.
Lastly
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,
by the upgrade of
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upgrading
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also
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help
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helps
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 to become a leader type critical thinking
which
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, which
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 will help to take part in politics
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, which
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which gives
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bringing
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 positive and good change
for
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to
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 society and
for
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the
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 nation. In conclusion, without ambition
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life
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, life
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 can
stuck
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get stuck
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on
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in
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 one moment
so
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, so
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work
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working
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according to
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 their interest make better
life
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 for
yourself
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oneself
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 and for
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the family
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family
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family,
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 so they can feel proud
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as
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, as
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 well as society
it
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, which
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 always gives positivity in
the
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apply
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life
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.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly. Say how important ambition is, and say more clearly if it is positive, negative, or both.
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Use one clear main idea in each body paragraph. Then add one example that directly supports it.
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Explain examples more. Some examples are listed, but the link to the main question is not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphing. Your essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion, but some long parts are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words correctly, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar because some sentences are hard to understand, and this affects flow.
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You answer the topic and talk about ambition and success through the whole essay.
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You give some examples from school, sports, and jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
You try to connect ideas with words like moreover, furthermore, and overall.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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