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The table below shows expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.

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The given table illustrates the advertising expenditure of four car brands across five different areas — press,
cinema
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, outdoor, radio, and
TV
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 — in 2002, expressed in millions of
dollars
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all companies allocated the highest amount of money to
TV
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 advertising,
while
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 total
cinema
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 investment was the lowest across all brands. Regarding press and
cinema
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 advertising,
Renault
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 spent 45
million
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dollars
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 on press advertising,
whereas
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Vauxhall
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 spent approximately 8
million
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dollars
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 in the same sector. Rover and Cetirizine did not invest in
cinema
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 promotion, unlike
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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, which spent 6 and 5
million
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dollars
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 respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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 each invested an equal amount in outdoor advertising at 7
million
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dollars
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,
while
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 Cetirizine spent just over twice as much as Rover at 2
million
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dollars
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. Regarding radio and
TV
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 advertising, all companies spent the same amount on radio advertising at 2
million
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dollars
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 each. In terms of
TV
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 advertising,
Vauxhall
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 ranked highest at 65
million
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dollars
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, followed by Rover at 65
million
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dollars
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 as well.
Renault
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 and Cetirizine each spent 45
million
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dollars
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respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, tv, dollars, renault, million, vauxhall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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