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The scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

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The bar chart depicts the scores of three teams, namely
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 A,
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 B, and
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 C, per seasın from 2002 to 2005.
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, the figures fluctuate over the period.
Team
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 B had the highest
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 each year despite its gradual decline.
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 A and
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 C,
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, had a volatile pattern through the years.
Initially
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, in
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 the figures of
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 B peaked at 82
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, representing the highest level of the whole chart.
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, scores dramatically fell
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and dropped to 43
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 in 2004. From 2002 to 2004,
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 A, though, experienced a significant rise
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 35
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, just before decreasing dramatically to 8
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. Somewhat similar to
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 A, scores by
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 C rose consistently from
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10 points
 to
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, and reached its highest point in 2003,
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 experienced a sharp decline and dropped
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 5
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, comprising the lowest score of the whole period

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear end line to sum up the main changes.
coherence cohesion
Group ideas by team or by year in a more simple way.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like from, then, after that, and while.
task achievement
Cover all teams in all years more fully.
task achievement
Check numbers and compare them in a more exact way.
task achievement
Add one or two more key points, not only the highest and lowest.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear start and a clear overall view.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas mostly move in a good time order.
task achievement
You mention key changes, like rise and fall.
task achievement
You use some data to support your points.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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