The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and the same area today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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maps below compare a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and in the present time.
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,
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beachfront area underwent significant modernizations
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and additions. To start with, the benches and the pavilion on the north side of the beach remain the same in both periods.
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, the car park in 1950
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expanded into two areas: one replacing the playground, and the other was enlarged, but situated at the same location.
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of the development, the street around the town was
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extended
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to the
light house
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lighthouse
, whose size was
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improved. Adjacent to the
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lighthouse
, the 25-meter-deep swimming pool remained unchanged, unlike the one on the opposite side
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has been extended to twice its size, with a depth of 50 meters. Two surf clubs have
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been added to the place: one on the west, with a restaurant, and the other on the east. The beach became much smaller
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the height of the sea current.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • beachfront
  • area
  • natural
  • buildings
  • changed
  • constructions
  • hotels
  • apartments
  • park
  • replaced
  • commercial
  • trees
  • green spaces
  • decreased
  • development
  • access
  • paths
  • roads
  • natural beauty
  • affected
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