The chart gives data about the number of users of five different communication services worldwide from 1998 to 2008.

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The line graph shows the
number
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of
people
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that
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who
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used five different communication
servives
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services
worldwide from 1998 until 2008.
Overall
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, the
number
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of cellular phone
service
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users
are
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has
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increased rapidly
through out
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throughout
the
years
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,
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however
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apply
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the rest of the
services
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does
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have
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not
have a
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had
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significant changes over the
years
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. At the start of
1998
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1998,
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the
number
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of
celular
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cellular
phone
service
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usage
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users
stood at 4
people
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,
then
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it
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grew
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sharply to 41
people
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in 2006,
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it is forecast that it will increasing for the
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ahead.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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of
people
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that
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who
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used landline and internet
services
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start
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started
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at 15 and 3
people
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in 1998, and it kept
flew
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flying
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gradually for the next 3
years
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to 19 and 10 in 2004.
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Furthermore
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it can be seen that
,
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apply
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the
number
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of landline
service
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usage
is
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did
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not
shown
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show
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any
spesific
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specific
changes until 2006 to 20
people
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,
while
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compare
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compared
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to the
number
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of internet
service
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usage
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it increased adequately to
nealry
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nearly
20
people
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in the same year.
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, for the year
ahead
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ahead,
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there
is
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are
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only
a
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apply
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small changes for the
number
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of both of the
services
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.
Lastly
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, the
last
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two
services
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had the same amount of users
through out
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throughout
the
years
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,
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they both
start
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started
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at 0
user
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users
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in 1998 and only had a small climb to 3 users in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, service, years, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of users
  • communication services
  • worldwide
  • from 1998 to 2008
  • increase
  • go up
  • rise quickly
  • grow slowly
  • remain low
  • become the highest
  • the most used service
  • the least used service
  • pass
  • overtake
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • almost the same
  • a steady rise
  • a sharp increase
  • little change
  • over the period
  • by the end of the period
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