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The bar chart below shows number of seals, whales, and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from to 2006 to 2018

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The bar chart shows the
number
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 of
seals
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,
whales
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, and dolphins recorded between 2006 and 2018 in gormez straits ,
the
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with the
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 highest
number
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 recorded in 2018 and the lowest
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 recorded in 2006 . In 2006 recoded 43
seals
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 more than
whales
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 and dolphins
the
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; the
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deffrence appearse
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difference appeared
and
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, and
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 the
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 of
seals
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 ,
whales
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, dolphine in the same level between 20 and 25 . In 2014 seas and dolohins are increased more than
whales
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 . In
2018
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2018,
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 the highest
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number
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apply
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number
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 of dolphins recorded through all years
and
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, and
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 the second
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number
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highest number
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 recorded are
seals
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 , and
whales
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 decreased
less
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by less
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 than 30
whales
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 .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, seals, whales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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