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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The diagram compares the
price
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 of
banana
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bananas
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 in four different countries in 10 years survey (1994-2004) Generally speaking, the national
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price
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prices
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 tend to fluctuate during the survey period,
while
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 the highest figure shows by Japan, the USA and Germany have the lowest unit, as those two nations share the identical rate in the
last
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 period. In 1994, it can be observed that Japan had
the
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a
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 promising
price
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, approximately 2
dollars
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,
before
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which
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then
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 increased drastically to double
of
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apply
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its original level.
However
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, it was broken to its initial figure until
in
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apply
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2000, after which
decreased
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it decreased
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 noticeably to 1.5
dollars
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. Fortunately, their selling
price
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 rose considerably to 2.5
dollar
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dollars
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 in the end.
On the other hand
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, the United States remained
unchaged
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unchanged
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 during the period, amounting to 1
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dollars
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dollar
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 for each year. Showing
the
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a
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 similar pattern for 6 years (1.5
dollars
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), France and Germany were stagnant before
went
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going
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 down minimally in 2000.
By contrast
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, France ended up as it was in their first
selling
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sale
,
whereas
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 Germany closed their rate as it showed by the USA.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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