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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart illustrates
that
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the
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 ratio of British individuals who
donut
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donate
 to charity in different age ranges in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it clearly
show
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shows
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 that people who were 36-50 and 51-65
years
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 old represented the highest figure in 1990 and 2010 across all the ages
respectievely
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respectively
,
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however
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however,
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 the lowest figures
significantly were
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were significantly
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 recorded in 1990 and 2010 by 18-25
years
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 old people. In 1990, young people who were 18-25
years
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 old accounted for the smallest proportion of
helping
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help
 in
england
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England
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, at nearly 17%,
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this
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 ratio of help showed an upward trend until approximetely 32% percentage in 26-35
years
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 old.
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, contributing hit
in
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an
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 all-time high of around 45% in 36-50
years
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 old, after that giving money to charity
decreasded
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decreased
 gradually from 45% to 32% in 51-65
years
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 old
and
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, and
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 it slowly continued to fall after 65
years
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 old , eventually losing %3. By 2010, taken gotten donation by charity reached a record low
as
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, as
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 approximetely 7% in 18-
25
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25-year-olds
years
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 old
,
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;
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in 26-35years old,
this
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 figure quadrupled compared with before ages.
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, money found steadily expanded from 24% to 35% in 36-
45
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45-year-olds
years
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 old,
then
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 it peaked at nearly 40% in 46-
55
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55-year-olds
years
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 old.
Furthermore
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,
small
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a small
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 fall
demonstrated
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was demonstrated
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 after 65
years
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 old, accounting for 35%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage: a number out of 100
  • age range: a group of people of similar age
  • charity: an organization that helps people
  • give money: donate
  • figure: number
  • rise: go up
  • fall: go down
  • peak: the highest point
  • youngest group: the people with the lowest age
  • oldest group: the people with the highest age
  • compared with: when we look at two things together
  • overall: the main idea
  • whereas: used to show contrast
  • slightly: a little
  • significantly: by a lot
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