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Band 4

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 contend the
news
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frome
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from
 television shows or read magazines are way to connection with
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the world
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while
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 others believe
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otherwise
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 because they think
news
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 is not important and
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 way to connection with
world
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the world
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not
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is not
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 uplifting in
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 era. In my
opinion
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 I believe the
news
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 has
negative
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a negative
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 effect on
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specific
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 bad
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example
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 it make person nervous all the time ,
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 as when the world was in
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 korona a lot of
people
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become
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 ill because
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 impact of
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news
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the news
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. On the one hand,
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why is it
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 crucial to see
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news
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the news
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in
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 day? In fact it not have any mean know because all
people
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 care about what happened in social media than any channel or newspaper,
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 for long time has negative effect for numerous reasons
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 as it make you nervous and afraid all time additional you lose your energy and ability, you can name the
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 (slow murderer ) because the impact of your afraid and ancontrol situation not just in your mind it
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 can damage the physical condition.
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 positive aspects?
from
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 my perspective,
news
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 can teach you
sometime
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 how to be
wisely
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wise
 in life or how to take care of yourself and your family
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,
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 but not all
news
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do
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 that
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 of them damage more than
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give
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end
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 you should balance and take care in what you see or what you lessen
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 remember any thing come more than you need
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will damage you.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view all through the essay.
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Add clearer main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph should explain why news is bad, and another can explain limited good points.
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Use one or two simple real examples that fit your idea. The corona example is useful, but explain it more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like firstly, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the same idea many times. Build one point, explain it, then move to the next point.
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You gave a clear personal opinion in the introduction.
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You tried to discuss both sides before giving your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like on the one hand, on the other hand, and in the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Informed
  • Current events
  • Public awareness
  • Local news
  • Global issues
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Bias
  • Community
  • Public safety
  • Health advisories
  • Market trends
  • Traffic updates
  • Weather forecasts
  • Educate
  • Raise awareness
  • Opinion formation
  • Decision making
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