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universties must accept an equall number of students in all courses. do you agree or disagree?

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 people believe that colleges
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 must
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 both men and women equally in all courses. The essay totally agrees
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 statement because it prevents
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descrimination
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discrimination
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 equality. First and foremost, the reason why schools must accept
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 equal numbers of learners is to promote gender-equality.
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, having both male and female pupils
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 will enable the trainees. To understand the importance of possessing equal-rights. In
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today's
 society, the most crucial thing is to make every person know that they are valued and their voice matters. I remember the time
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 got accepted
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 saw Male Healthcare Students. Which reminded me that life
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 is about having the same rights
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as others.
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, in
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 era. There is too much descrimination, happing . If
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 issue of not giving equal-opportunities is not prevented, most of the people end-up not
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 their dream careers.To illustrate, in
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 institution,
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 20 Males and 20 Females.In order to avoid making one gender
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look more important than the other sex.Life is about balancing and fairness. A lot of scholars miss opportunities, because someone believes they are not fit to do a specific course. In conclusion, institutions must
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recruit
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equal
 number of both female and male students. In order to avoid
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discrimination
 and being able to promote gender-equality.

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Write one clear idea in each part. Do not stop the sentence too much with commas or full stops.
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Use clear link words like First, Second, For example, and In conclusion in a simple way.
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Answer the question more directly all through the essay. Keep your opinion very clear in every body part.
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Check word choice and spelling because some words are hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
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You give two main reasons for your opinion.
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You stay on the topic and your position is clear: you agree.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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