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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the history for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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History
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 serves as
a
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our borderline base, which helped us grow, build and expand.
History
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 itself tells us where we were once
were
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and helped us to achieve
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this
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 modern technologies and much more as of today.
People
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 who
thinks
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think
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 that we cannot learn anything from
history
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 may tend to focus on the
future
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 rather than
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history
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, but
history
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 serves us as a memory and actions that the
people
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 from before our time
survive
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survived
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 and
produces
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produced
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 things which lead us to our current selves. Rather than focusing on
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future
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the future
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which
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, which
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 is unkown
people
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 should learn their
history
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 as it acts as a guide which helps
people
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 in
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 to avoid any mistakes.
People
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 cannot progress if we have no
history
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. Old knowledge is important
which
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, which
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 serves
you
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as a reminder
on which
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 things to do and
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what
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 to avoid
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. Moreover
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moreover
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,
history
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 helps us
grow
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grow,
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 make
progress
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progress,
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helped as
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and
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 innovate in many specific fields
including
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, including
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 engineering, health care, biology, astrology
in
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,
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 physics and
chemistory
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chemistry
. Today we were able to make breakthroughs
are all
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because of
history
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. Conclusion, each passing moment is a part of our
history
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all
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; all
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 the inventions and everything now
is
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are
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 a part of our
history
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. So the idea and
believe
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belief
 of individuals thinking that we cannot learn from
history
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 are incorrect, as we cannot progress in
future
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 without
history
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.

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Answer both sides more clearly. Give one full idea for each view, then give your own view.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your main ideas.
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Explain your ideas more. Some points are too general and repeated.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraph order: intro, one side, other side, your view, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, however, for example, because, so, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easier to follow. Some parts are hard to understand now.
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You gave a clear opinion that history is important.
coherence and cohesion
There is a conclusion at the end.
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The essay stays on the main topic of history and life today.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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