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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 word

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In our modern world health of our planet
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 become a widespread debate.
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 some people
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 that actions of ordinary people aren't impressive for
reliefing
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relieving
 the situation, others argue about the fact that not only
governmentals
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governments
 have the responsibility in reducing the damages to the environment, but
also
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 citizens have to act. On the one hand, in undoubtely
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 governments have a major impact in trying to solve the impact that human
being
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beings
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 have
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 the
enviroment
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environment
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Politcs
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Politics
 have the power to made lawa and
expecially
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especially
 on
large
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 scale and long period can
stablish
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establish
 rules and laws.
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 thay can tackle air pollution
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 CO2
emission
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emissions
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 deriving from a large use of private means of transport, prohibiting the use of cars in the
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 of citieswhere
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 problem is deeply important.
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, each citizen can tackle the problems of pollution
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by applying
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 simple
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everyday
 actions.
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 going to work by
walk
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walking
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 or
cyicling
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cycling
 when possible, or avoiding to use to much water. To
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 up, I think that a balanced intervention of both governments and
citizen
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citizens
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 can lead to a decrease of enviroment's problems
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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how much you agree or disagree in the first part, and keep this same view through the essay.
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Add one more clear main idea in each body part and explain it more. Your points are good, but they are too short.
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Use more exact examples to support your ideas. For example, name one law, one city rule, or one daily action and explain its result.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas connect more smoothly. Use simple linking words like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar so each sentence is easy to follow. Some parts are hard to understand now.
coherence and cohesion
Write a fuller conclusion. Repeat your main view in one clear sentence and sum up your two main points.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You discuss both government and people, so your ideas are relevant to the topic.
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You give examples such as transport, walking, cycling, and saving water.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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