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The chart below gives information Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who bought or consumed
coffee
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 and tea over the previous four weeks in five Australian cities
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Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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.
Overall
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, visiting a café was the most popular option in every city except
Adelaide
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,
while
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 purchasing fresh
coffee
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 was consistently the least common activity across all five cities. Regarding café visits,
Melbourne
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 recorded the highest figure at approximately 70%, followed by
Hobart
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 at 63% and
Sydney
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 at around 60%.
Brisbane
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 saw a slightly lower proportion of 55%,
while
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Adelaide
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 had the smallest share at roughly 50%. In terms of instant
coffee
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, the percentages rose steadily from 45% in
Sydney
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 to 48% in
Melbourne
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 and 53% in
Brisbane
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.
Adelaide
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then
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 experienced a drop of about 4%, before figures peaked in
Hobart
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 at 54%. As for fresh
coffee
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 purchases,
Melbourne
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 led with around 43%, closely followed by
Hobart
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 at 40% and
Sydney
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 at approximately 38%.
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 had the lowest proportions at around 35% each, suggesting that fresh
coffee
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 was less favoured in these two cities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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