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The graph below shows the wheat export of three different areas from 1985 to 1990

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The shown line graph represents the wheat
export
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 of three different regions between 1985 and 1990.
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, it is evident that Canada accounted for the highest number
by the
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for
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 most of the period, went up from just under 20 to roughly 25
in
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 its peak,
however
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 witnessed a downward trend
by
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in
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 the
two
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apply
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last
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years
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two years
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.
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, Australia and
European
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the European
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 community fluctuated between nearly 15
respectively
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million respectively
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, but the
second
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latter
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 eventually overtook the lead
top of the
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in
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 wheat exportation by the end of the period. In 1985, Canada recorded the highest proportion of
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export
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exports
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 with roughly 20.
This
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 number declined in the following year to slightly over 15
,
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however
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 witnessed its upward trend in the next two years
with
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, with
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 25, 1987 to 1988. Afterwards, Canada plunged dramatically to around 15 in 1989, and went up to almost 20 by 1990. Australia’s share of
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export
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exports
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 fluctuated between nearly 15
from
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per cent from
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 1985 to 1987, but eventually experienced a rapid downfall by the
next
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following
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 years and took the lowest position at just above 10
.
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per cent.
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 Meanwhile,
European
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the European
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 community
after
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, after
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 its drop in 1986 to the smallest
export
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, ranged from 15 to 20 and overtook the second and
then
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 the first position by the end, in 1990. Оцени

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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