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Band 4

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disgaree with this statement?

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Science has been the most significant part of human life since mankind's creation. There is an ongoing debate about whether scholars ought to focus on
development
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the development
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 of people's lives. I disagree with
this
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 statement
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due to
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 several reasons. From my perspective, humans
has
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 reached
its
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their
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 peak era with
its
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 highly advanced technologies.

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Write a full answer. Your essay is too short, so your ideas are not fully shown.
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State your main view in a clear way and keep it the same through the essay.
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Add main reasons and explain each one with simple examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like because, so, also, however, and for example.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence follow the one before it. Some ideas now jump too fast.
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You clearly show your opinion: you disagree.
coherence and cohesion
Your first lines are about the topic, so the reader knows the subject.
coherence and cohesion
The writing has a simple start and is easy to follow at first.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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