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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart provides key information about a
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tourists
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tourist's
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 spending
leisure
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on leisure
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 activities during the holiday in Greece in August 2019, the average number of
hours
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 each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian. The units are measured in.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
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the Chinese
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 had the highest amount of
tourists
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 spending
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on
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reading
books
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.
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, in most of the nation
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, going
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 to visit
places
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have
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 the lowest proportion,
whereas
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 reading
books
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have
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 significantly higher
spent
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spending
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 on
the
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apply
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leisure time when
their
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they're
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 on
holidays
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holiday
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. 
According to
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 what is shown,
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the Chinese
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the most rate
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rate the highest
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 in 8
hours
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 of reading
books
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 during
the
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free time activities, to visited
places
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 was notable
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, to
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to see got
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with
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 an approximately the lowest per cent. American
tourists
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are
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almost 5
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,
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nearly the same amount
by
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as
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 4
hours
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. In terms of Turkish
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 had almost the same rate of visiting
places
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to
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as
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 US
tourists
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 by 3
hours
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to each other
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apply
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. over 4
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,
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to the
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which made the difference between reading
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 .
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, Brazilian
tourists
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 had considerably higher in visiting the beach by 6
hours
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,
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which
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 made
visited
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the visited
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places
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got
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get
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 slightly under 2
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, hours, books, places with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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