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Online education is rapidly increasing in popularity. What has led to this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online learning compared to in-class instructions?

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When the digital age approaches
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 generation, many of its potential has been discovered, built and leveraged, creating many effective and useful
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. Among those innovations, Online
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 to
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 popularity in recent years, step-by-step, directly competing with traditional classes with direct instructions.
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 instruction. Regarding the advantages, online learning has become one of the most rapidly developed industry since its birth, and the reason for that
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 its features: Accessibility, Convenience and Optional.
Students
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 are given the
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 to attend
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 anywhere they want, sometimes in a
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 coffee shop where they find it easy to focus on the subject, or just learn inside their bedroom where they don'
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 have to use their vehicles,
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 there is no
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, no risk of any car accident.
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 but not least, they can choose when to attend
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 some doubts and
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uncertainties
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development
 throughout recent years.
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 traditional
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 offer direct instructions that a screen unfortunately isn'tcapable to,
students
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and
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 for the
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 have the
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 and express
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 with clarity and
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, a "strict" atmosphere, which most
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 works as an elegant way for teachers to force their
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 into high-concentration mode, which mostly mean more
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efficient
 way of learning.
On the other hand
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, online
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 can sometimes be taken unseriously. As they are designed to be consumed actively, the learning efficiency is dependent on
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 attitude, and a loose control over course takers may result in a bad strudying record.
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, online
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 deliver lectures through a screen
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,
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, leading to limited
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. At the same
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,
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, it requires vehicles to get to school, and for a long
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 to traffic jams and poses the risk of
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accidents
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 provide the
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 to re-attend
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, and sometimes, asking a question can cost a huge amount of
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,
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 online
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 offer convenience, flexibility and the
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 as finance, IT, art,
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 require physical precense
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 the medical field, surgery,
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, and others typically need.

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Answer all parts more directly. Say clearly why online learning is growing, then give good and bad points for both sides.
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Use simpler and clearer main ideas. Some ideas are good, but a few parts are hard to understand.
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Add more clear examples. For example, give one real case for online study and one for class study.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph follow one clear plan: main idea, explanation, example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like first, also, however, as a result, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Check long sentences. Many are too long and this makes your meaning less clear.
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You answer the main topic and compare online learning with in-class teaching.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You include several relevant points like time, travel, control, and class interaction.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual learning environment
  • asynchronous/synchronous learning
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • webinar
  • interactive content
  • distance education
  • course management system
  • learning management system (LMS)
  • cyberlearning
  • pedagogy
  • screen fatigue
  • digital divide
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